Tuesday, March 4, 2014

CLOSER TO YOU NOW

CLOSER TO YOU NOW

Wanting to hold the moment
On the day you passed away
For I'm afraid that I will lose you
As time slips further away

Only just a breath ago
You were very much alive
Death has now become you
As the minutes go ticking by

As each day goes on and on
I will forever see
Your voice, your touch, your very being
Creeping further away from me

Hanging on to what once was
Is what I understand
If only for this moment I have
Your last breath inside my hand

Gripping today with woeful
White knuckled bitter sorrows
For I'm closer to you this moment
Than I will be for all tomorrows

~hopehayduk2014~

32 comments:

  1. hey you...its been a while...
    mmm...nice depth of feeling in this...
    i think too that we grab those moments in verse
    that we want to hold onto just a bit longer
    and not let them go...in our white knuckle writing...

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  2. The image of holding a "last breath inside my hand": a standout.

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  3. The sorrow of the slipping away... keeping the last breath in the hand.. what a strong image.

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    1. thank you for your comment Bjorn!

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  4. A gorgeous poem, Hope. Heartfelt and just gorgeous. xo

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  5. this poem def brings you closer to him or her... no matter how much time goes by you'll never lose that special one... very good write... your longing is felt.

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    1. thank you so much for your comment Anthony!

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  6. Very touching, Hope. Forgetfulness is both curse and blessing. Every moment with our loved ones is precious, but we must let go.

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    1. agreed! thank you for your comment dkirkstokes!

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  7. Tenderly painful, Hope. And yet, very Hopeful! You have a way.

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  8. Hope Dear,

    It's beautiful and philosophical. I like the hue of positivism in this.
    You have a way with words :-)

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  9. "Gripping today with woeful
    White knuckled bitter sorrows
    For I'm closer to you this moment
    Than I will be for all tomorrows"
    So sad. So final. Sorrow well written.

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    1. thank you vbholmes! perhaps Sorrow would be a more appropriate title for it?

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  10. Those we lose stay with us forever--only the grief softens a bit. Little reminders keep popping up to keep those memories alive.

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    1. agreed Victoria! as i contemplate this poem even more i am recognizing the fact that the more 'tomorrows' build and time is collected, even though i get further away from their former existence, the gap between their world and mine is closing in therefore lessening the pain of their loss. And little reminders of them help keep them very much alive! thank you so much for your comment!

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  11. A very sad experience, faced without sentimentality, but with quite dignity. Good write.

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  12. If only for this moment I have
    Your last breath inside my hand... that is so moving...and i can totally understand that you just wanna hold it... capture it with words to make the memory..the moment...the person last..

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  13. Delicate, touching and beautiful at the same time, your poetry teaches us to hang on to memories and make them last. Your poems have always been a breath of life, now more so than ever because you have taken something seemingly negative and added lasting and positive meaning to it.

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    1. such kind words thank you Munir!

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  14. It sends goosebumps up my spine.. so visually clear so real.

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    1. thank you Gaia! nice to see you :)

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  15. Hi dear Hope. As always your words touch the heart and bring to mind all the loved ones that I've lost. I feel the positive side too. I know they're close and each memory is a blessing and constant message to always remember them. Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent.

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    1. such kind words yaya! thank you! always nice to see you!

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  16. Touching and beautiful at the same time, love it. Thank you for sharing with us.
    Warmly
    marinela

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    1. Hi Marinela! welcome and thank you for your kind words :)

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